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Mount Hermon Reminds Me Who Walks on Water - a poem

Started by goodwordediting · 9 months ago

Here’s the poem I worked on last week. It’s just 8 lines–technically an octave–so it may be an incomplete sonnet. (Sonnets are one octave, followed by a sestet to make a total of 14 lines.)
I can’t decide if this one has more to say ... Continue reading »

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  • Ann @Holy Experience

    1 year ago

    May I add but one word to Amy's pronouncement?
    It's done... *well.*

    Glad you made it home...
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  • L.L. Barkat

    1 year ago

    I always like your poetry. In this one, I wasn't sure what the "three" referred to. I did figure "Peter" was some novice flyer, so it was fun to hear that it was a girl (woman?).

    I wasn't sure about the sense of non-closure at the end, but then I'm thinking that in some genius way it captures the uncertainty of flight or perhaps that middle place one experiences between the fall and the recovery.
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  • L.L. Barkat

    1 year ago

    I just noticed you have a podcast feed. That's so cool. (For our listening pleasure!). Now, please tell me what the "three" means in your poem (I'm here, caught between the dip and the recovery).
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  • Marcus

    1 year ago

    L.L., Peter is three. The real person was a girl. Her name was probably not Peter. : ) She was also not three. But I like the number three.
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  • Marcus

    1 year ago

    Ann, you are kind. Thanks.
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