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Rush Out to Nature, Rush Back to Work

Started by goodwordediting · 9 months ago

My friend L. L. Barkat FINALLY discovered the beauty of Texas this past week at Laity Lodge. She also challenged Jim Martin and me to post something we had written while we were there. [UPDATE: my friend, Tod Bolsinger joined the game too, and here's a link to his post.]
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  • jp

    11 months ago

    Me gusta la poema.
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  • Marcus

    11 months ago

    Whoa, JP. That's high praise coming from you! I think you just made my week.
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  • Marcus

    11 months ago

    Oops. Earlier versions of this post referred to the poem as a sestet which is six lines. Apparently, Math Boy (me) can't count to 8. Duhr!

    Also, isn't that branded gabcast player cool? I'm playing around with gabcast as an option for the Laity Lodge podcast. You can get much simpler than gabcast in my opinion. (And I've tried them all!)
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  • jp

    11 months ago

    It's quiet and solid, and here and there it might get tweaked to up the sonic qualities and diction, but I like it. Technically it wouldn't be a sonnet what with the couplets and all, but I've seen fourteeners in couplets that are close enough to sonnet-ude.
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  • L.L. Barkat

    10 months ago

    I think I missed the depth of this poem on the first reading. And the second reading. Then I listened to your reading several times.

    Then something began to happen. A deeper philosophy started to emerge at the top, the way you emerged at the top of the cliff by gradual incline that hadn't really gained your attention.

    Now, I still wasn't sure about the ending, because it didn't pursue this aspect of the poem...the sense that some of the places life takes us happen almost unawares. And before we know it, we've passed by equally interesting alternatives to arrive at a vista, broad and enchanting. A place we never want to leave.
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