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Re: Rush Out to Nature, Rush Back to Work

L.L. Barkat — Sat, 16 Aug 2008 14:18:43 -0000

I think I missed the depth of this poem on the first reading. And the second reading. Then I listened to your reading several times.

Then something began to happen. A deeper philosophy started to emerge at the top, the way you emerged at the top of the cliff by gradual incline that hadn't really gained your attention.

Now, I still wasn't sure about the ending, because it didn't pursue this aspect of the poem...the sense that some of the places life takes us happen almost unawares. And before we know it, we've passed by equally interesting alternatives to arrive at a vista, broad and enchanting. A place we never want to leave.

Re: Rush Out to Nature, Rush Back to Work

jp — Wed, 06 Aug 2008 22:13:33 -0000

It's quiet and solid, and here and there it might get tweaked to up the sonic qualities and diction, but I like it. Technically it wouldn't be a sonnet what with the couplets and all, but I've seen fourteeners in couplets that are close enough to sonnet-ude.

Re: Rush Out to Nature, Rush Back to Work

Marcus — Wed, 06 Aug 2008 16:02:09 -0000

Oops. Earlier versions of this post referred to the poem as a sestet which is six lines. Apparently, Math Boy (me) can't count to 8. Duhr!

Also, isn't that branded gabcast player cool? I'm playing around with gabcast as an option for the Laity Lodge podcast. You can get much simpler than gabcast in my opinion. (And I've tried them all!)

Re: Rush Out to Nature, Rush Back to Work

Marcus — Wed, 06 Aug 2008 13:28:57 -0000

Whoa, JP. That's high praise coming from you! I think you just made my week.

Re: Rush Out to Nature, Rush Back to Work

jp — Wed, 06 Aug 2008 13:27:22 -0000

Me gusta la poema.