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Re: Sentence Tip #3 - Get Long and Loose and Conversational

Marcus — Tue, 13 Mar 2007 16:00:16 -0000

Eve, I completely agree with you. In general, I prefer short punchy sentences, or simple compound sentences.

The key to good prose is really the quantity of the tricks in your toolbox, though. Sentence variety is a important trick to understand fully, I think.

Re: Sentence Tip #3 - Get Long and Loose and Conversational

Eve Nielsen — Wed, 07 Mar 2007 09:59:16 -0000

I tend to prefer shorter sentences that don't appear to be run-ons at first glance, but I am willing to attempt this new (new to me) style of sentence for the purpose of practice in the fine art of writing and to test how long I can blab on about who-knows-what. :)

Re: Sentence Tip #3 - Get Long and Loose and Conversational

Jessica Doyle — Tue, 06 Mar 2007 18:58:23 -0000

I belive the appreciation begins in the home. I am an avid gardener and couldn't imagine if trees only came in one shape, size or colour.

The ornamental cherry trees blossom in about a month here in Vancouver BC. I'll post some pictures when they begin to bloom. Your daughter would like them. They are all pink and burgundy. When the wind blows it is as if the rain is scented petals here in spring.

Have a great day Mark.

Re: Sentence Tip #3 - Get Long and Loose and Conversational

Marcus — Tue, 06 Mar 2007 12:30:01 -0000

Jessica, great work! My daughter would love pink trees.

If only more people appreciated trees of any color...

Re: Sentence Tip #3 - Get Long and Loose and Conversational

Jessica Doyle — Mon, 05 Mar 2007 20:25:04 -0000

God, with his unlimited creativity can ultimately adjust the color from green to pink, if he so wishes, when he makes a tree for us humans to gaze upon, eat from and appreciate.

Re: Sentence Tip #3 - Get Long and Loose and Conversational

Marcus — Mon, 05 Mar 2007 13:47:11 -0000

Ted, I think you hit the target. Sentence variety is the literary equivalent of a speaker who engages the audience with vocal variety and such.

For example, I adore certain incredible theologians who I will leave unnamed here, but listening to their recordings from Laity just lulls me to sleep.

Simply Christian is on my shelf waiting patiently. I should probably pick it up again!

Re: Sentence Tip #3 - Get Long and Loose and Conversational

Ted Gossard — Fri, 02 Mar 2007 17:33:37 -0000

Maybe it's a good change of pace to do that in writing, here and there, to keep your reader from being lulled to sleep, and maybe forget to read the book again, since "out of sight, out of mind".

Ha.

Re: Sentence Tip #3 - Get Long and Loose and Conversational

Ted Gossard — Fri, 02 Mar 2007 17:32:24 -0000

Mark, Very interesting again. I tend to want to avoid those kind of sentences. Though I'll bet I do that sometimes. I've kind of noticed a bit of those type of sentences in N.T. Wright's book, "Simply Christian", which I'm reading- I think.

Ernest Hemingway's "The Old Man and the Sea" was a treat for me. Rare, since I don't ordinarily take to fiction.

Re: Sentence Tip #3 - Get Long and Loose and Conversational

Marcus — Fri, 02 Mar 2007 11:15:37 -0000

Falstaff was the queen's favorite character! But it's good to hear that you don't have his problems of excess.

Re: Sentence Tip #3 - Get Long and Loose and Conversational

Mike — Fri, 02 Mar 2007 09:43:10 -0000

Just goes to show I'm not all Falstaff! (I could never drink that stuff...)

Re: Sentence Tip #3 - Get Long and Loose and Conversational

Marcus — Fri, 02 Mar 2007 09:31:19 -0000

Mike--or is it BillRay?--
Great sentence! Man, I love good sentences. And such a fun direction you've taken it.

Re: Sentence Tip #3 - Get Long and Loose and Conversational

Mike — Thu, 01 Mar 2007 18:13:33 -0000

God can make a tree, but because we are all God's creations, and because we each perceive the world through our own senses and experiences, each tree God creates has the potential to create billions of experiences, and over time, the number of possible experiences begins to approach an uncountable number, proving that God's wisdom (even in creating a single tree) is TRULY infinite!

Re: Sentence Tip #3 - Get Long and Loose and Conversational

Marcus — Thu, 01 Mar 2007 17:18:13 -0000

I meant no other takers, of course. Craver already got his A+.

Re: Sentence Tip #3 - Get Long and Loose and Conversational

Marcus — Thu, 01 Mar 2007 17:17:26 -0000

Nice cumulative sentence there Craver.

Are we fishing or making house calls? The metaphor got mixed, so I'm confused.

You make an excellent point about 1 Peter referring to the day of the Lord rather than creation. I hadn't thought of that.

No takers on the assignment?

Re: Sentence Tip #3 - Get Long and Loose and Conversational

Craver-VII — Thu, 01 Mar 2007 17:10:40 -0000

Oh, look! This door seems to be wide open. I dare say I shall venture in.

Iâ€™m glad you referenced the verse from 2nd Peter, because I wanted to point out that God, not being limited by time, as we are, can make a tree, (or anything for that matter) starting from nothing, taking His sweet time, and still produce a mature, fruit-bearing tree before a solar day is complete. Notice that the Bible speaks that way (2nd Peter) specifically about Godâ€™s plan of salvation, and not specifically about creation. In fact, every time the Bible specifically refers to creation, (such as when explaining Sabbath law) it talks in terms of days, not ages or events.

Re: Sentence Tip #3 - Get Long and Loose and Conversational

Marcus — Thu, 01 Mar 2007 14:35:39 -0000

Well, Lisa, my goodness. Thanks for your kind words. I do edit manuscripts from time to time, but I try to be very careful not to let my freelance fun interfere with my family time.

Re: Sentence Tip #3 - Get Long and Loose and Conversational

Lisa Gates — Thu, 01 Mar 2007 14:02:29 -0000

Mark, I absolutely adore your site. This post is so incredibly informative. Do you edit manuscripts (guess I should look at your bio...)