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What Happens When You Combine Aslan, Lawn Art, and Steam Shovels?

Started by goodwordediting · 9 months ago

You get a poem called “Garden of Stone and Flesh.” My attempt at blank verse for the time being.

Garden of Stone and Flesh
Frankie and Fran divorced and left a villa
in a culdesac. Fran’s weekend work bought the wrought
iron fence, each bar ... Continue reading »

4 comments

  • Ally

    2 years ago

    "wide brown eyes watched each gray
    body fall in the truck with a crash of dust."

    I love this... how crashes are supposed to be loud and heavy, and the dust is silent - but it floats away to infiltrate other places.. I don't know what I'm trying to say, I just love the image. This is great.
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  • L.L. Barkat

    2 years ago

    Brilliant. I love the movement of time. There's a poignancy in that.
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  • Shep

    2 years ago

    You hooked me with...

    in a culdesac. Fran's weekend work bought the wrought iron fence, each bar topped with a bulbous spike.

    There's a whole novel in that one line. But I have to ask, where did this come from?
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  • Marcus

    2 years ago

    I can't say exactly where it came from. But I can tell you the image had it's genesis in a house near Amy's childhood neighborhood that used to have a tremendous concrete statue garden.

    The poetic answer is that this poem must have come from the same place all "new" creation comes from—that same "Heav'nly Muse" who helped Milton sing

    "Of Man's First Disobedience, and the Fruit
    Of that Forbidden Tree, whose mortal taste
    Brought Death into the World, and all our woe,
    With loss of Eden, till one greater Man
    Restore us, and regain the blissful Seat..."
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